Thanks! As a novice writer, input is a great resource to improve future posts!
As I reread my original post, I can see your point on the biographical feel. The first post was sort of intentionally written that way to establish some history and color to the character, and future posts will be less so. I totally see your point on the dialogue needing some reformatting.
You called it on the Bond chick moment. That was completely intentional. I wanted to toss in some elements of his previous life. There is a strong chance of other people from his past popping up from time to time.
Also, dead on with the castellan restraints. I considered including references to this technique, but I thought it would be to similar to the Agent story.
Thanks again for your input.
Posted Tue at 10:25 am